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Ours is a death by drudgery

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Every morning, her Kraken-like lips yawn cavernous
with soporific starts and smothered dreams.  She holds me under
waves of snooze that squeeze every last drop of willpower
until I wash up on the cold steel basin once again.

Treated with burnt toast and bitter coffee in silence
cut only by the uncaring clickety-clack of exo-skeleton,
she dyes and embalms any prospect of excitement
with routine and repetition; rinse and repeat, rinse and repeat...

The clasp of her carpals and metacarpals stills my pen,
and the gentle caress of chalkboard nails tears me away
to gaze at vacuous orbits behind shadowed eyelids
so words fall like dead stars and doomed doves.

Cerebus jealously guards the gaps of her ribs
fearful that I might steal phoenix whispers
from the jaws of Haros and breathe the life
before the  constant treading of stagnant Styx.

Instead, hours of procrastination extinguish the flickering
liquid crystal display of tired eyes and tired mind,
and I reach out to my mistress.  She flexes her centipede spine
and shrugs away, and I curl up alone -- with her once again.
Some days it feels like routine and dreariness sucks all life out of living.  Also, I really dislike the meter in this piece but hey, what must do?

Questions for critique if you will:

1) Is the message that death here, is not a physical one but rather a life of uninspired lifelessness? If so, why or why not.

2) Does the use of Greek mythology and references to modern technology enhance or detract from the piece, and should I work more of those reference into the pieces.  What would you suggest instead?

3) What must do with meter ("(>_<)/")????
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